[Hilch]

Here is a song I wrote while watching my son riding his , got me thinking wouldn't it be nice to get on a bike and ride , do all that crazy stuff kids do on their bikes , it has a little twist in it towards the end . ( reality )

I call it

Mis-Guided Youth


Legs are thumping
Heart is pumping
Sweat running down my brow

Whizzing in and out cars
I 'm travelling pretty fast
There's no speed limit for me now

Dodging the walkers
Abusing the talkers
Ain't got time to get in a row <----like a arguement pronounced row rhymes with now

Legs are thumping
Heart is pumping
Sweat running down my brow

I had to jump a gutter
Heart starts to flutter
Don't you even try to slow me down

I see the coppers ahead
One is shaking his head
My happiness turns to a frown

They are going to book me
Who is going to believe me
Why can't you all just leave me alone

Legs no longer pumping
But the heart is thumping
I was just re-living my youth

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All feed back is greatly appreciated

[nagukush]

Hey Buddy

That was some nice writing . I really liked it
See you soon, Pal !!!

Thanks and Best Regds

Kush

[Hilch]

Thank-you
Nagokush

cheers

[feri52]

Hey Hich,
That was real good. Nice rhythm, good rhymes, flows pretty good just the way it is, although maybe a few tweaks would make it even better. I miss riding a bike like I did when I was a kid also, so I could really relate to it. I'd like to hear the melody with it. Any chance of that any time soon?
Keep up the good work,
Frank

[Hilch]

Hey Feri52

Yeah working on it just trying to find the right chord progression I don't know too many chords so I am just playing around with the ones I do know . I thinking of a real up tempo sort of thing . Any thoughts ? when you read it does come over as a slow song or a up tempo thing ?

Thanks for the feed back appreciated very much

[Hilch]

MM not real happy with it now after working on music for it so I added a bridge the rest of the song stays the same only addition is th bridge I'll put it in red for everyone

I had to jump a gutter
Heart starts to flutter
Don't you even try to slow me down

Bridge

Child inside
Keeps me alive
I just want to ride
Ride ride ride...

I see the coppers ahead
One is shaking his head
My happiness turns to a frown

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Now it will break the main song up a bit with a different chord progression ( hope that makes sense .. will post it soon still working on it

[Kirk Lorange]

Originally Posted by hilch

Hey Feri52

Yeah working on it just trying to find the right chord progression I don't know too many chords so I am just playing around with the ones I do know . I thinking of a real up tempo sort of thing . Any thoughts ? when you read it does come over as a slow song or a up tempo thing ?

Thanks for the feed back appreciated very much

Here are the related chords of three keys, hilch. Keys are families of notes/chords, so they naturaly go well together. The I is the main one of course, everything should start and end there:

------- I - ii - iii -IV- V - vi

C ----> C - Dm - Em - F - G - Am
D ----> D - Em - F#m - G - A - Bm
G ----> G - Am - Bm - C - D - Em

... hope you can decypher my rather crude chart. Those are for the keys of C, D and G. Read horizontally for each. Stick to one key, of course. You'll hear how the three majors are the backbone, the minors can all come nicely into play.

[Hilch]

Thanks Kirk

I have probably dodging chords such as Bm and F and F#m for far too long , might just be time to bite the bullet , I can play them I just find it difficult to find them in the middle of a song . I'll go and practice them more often and see what I can come up with ..

Thanks again

[feri52]

Hi Hilch,
I agree that it should be up tempo; that's how I hear it in my head. Don't worry about knowing a lot of chords. Many great songs were written with just a few simple chords, chords you probably already know.
Regards,
Frank

[Hilch]

Thanks Frank