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#1 OFFLINE   starsailor

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Posted 07 April 2012 - 05:17 AM

I just wrote this down, it's a rough draft of a song, it's written as a Country song which I don't do but I thought I'd post it up and if anyone wants to mess around with the idea, do a rewrite, do a tune for it etc.feel free.



All the good songs have been written


Pa I want to be a writer
Want to write songs and go far
Travel the world making music
With a hope and a prayer and guitar

Son you won't make a living
Son it won't make you a star
I've met men who tried it before you
And none of those ever went far, cos

All the good songs have been written
All the sad ones have been sung
The songs about love about feeling good
Have used all the chords that they possibly could
It's only a career til you're out of ideas
And son you may be smitten
But all the good songs have been written
And all the bad ones have been sung

Pa I know your sincere
But there's still lots of music and rhymes
Songs that folk still want to hear sung
To dance to and have a good time

Son I used to be like you
I'd play guitar and write songs
But it never made me a living
So I stopped when you came along, cos

All the good songs had been written
All the sad ones had been sung
The songs about love about feeling good
Had used all the chords that they possibly could
It's only a career til you're out of ideas
And son you may be smitten
But all the good songs have been written
And all the bad ones have been sung

I didn't know that you played once
You never told me you could
Do you still have it around pa
Playing with you would be good

Son I kept it around me
Put it in the loft where it's stayed
I could bring it down for a short time
Maybe we could have a play

We sat on the porch and we sung
The old songs that pa used to sing
He told me to keep making music
Remembered the joy it could bring, cos.

All the good songs ain't been written
All the sad ones ain't been sung
The songs about love about feeling good
May have used all the chords that they possibly could
If you want to play music we think that you should
And we will always be smitten
Cos all the good songs ain't been written
And all the bad ones ain't been sung


All The Best

Chris
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#2 OFFLINE   carol m

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Posted 07 April 2012 - 06:44 PM

Nice going Chris. What do you think about changing 'We sat on the porch and we sung' to 'We sat on the porch and we sang'. It's not a rhymed line, and I think that singing the vowel a would sound better than the u. Maybe make more sense too?

More nit-picking: this would depend on how the music went, but how about adding a yet to this line at the end?

Cos all the good songs ain't been written, yet....
And all the bad ones ain't been sung - I think sung is ok here.

My twisted sense of humor wants to add another 'yet' on to the end of the last line - not a serious suggestion. :)

No worries if you disagree, of course. Do you have a tune yet?
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Posted 08 April 2012 - 01:20 AM

No problem with changing that to sang Carol, not too sure about adding the yet though as that would just add a word that says the same thing as the original line and would change the flow a bit but it would depend on the way the performer delivers the song.

We sat on the porch and we sang
The old songs that pa used to sing
He told me to keep making music
Remembered the joy it could bring, cos.


Haven't got a tune, I'm working on something else at the moment and I just wrote this down when I had the idea and thought I'd post it to see if any members were interested in doing it, I thought it would be better if someone who sings Country did it but I suppose it could also work as a folk song too :)

Thanks for having a look Carol.

All The Best

Chris
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Posted 08 April 2012 - 02:27 AM

You're gonna have to do it for yourself, probably - does anyone know what happened to Paul? (sounds like the title of a song)
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Posted 08 April 2012 - 07:33 AM

thats a nice song chris id like to hear you sing it aswell. :yes:
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Posted 09 April 2012 - 02:08 AM

View Postcarol m, on 08 April 2012 - 02:27 AM, said:

You're gonna have to do it for yourself, probably - does anyone know what happened to Paul? (sounds like the title of a song)



Maybe :yes: don't know where Paul went, hope he's ok and will pop in soon.


View Postmicky mac, on 08 April 2012 - 07:33 AM, said:

thats a nice song chris id like to hear you sing it aswell. :yes:

Thanks for having a look Micky, I'll probably do it if no one else wants to but I'm hoping someone else might want to give it a go :yes:

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Posted 09 April 2012 - 11:08 AM

Chris,

Good theme, Nice write and plenty to work with.
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Posted 09 April 2012 - 11:19 AM

good write Chris. I can hear a tune as i'm reading it but still don't know enough to play it. Would love to hear you do something with this tho !


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Posted 11 April 2012 - 11:38 AM

Thanks for having a look Eddie and Johnny, feel free to mess around with it if you want to :leadguitar:
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Posted 11 April 2012 - 02:12 PM

old time cowboy country chords would wok well with that. Lots of lap steel twang fill would be perfect

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Posted 14 April 2012 - 03:59 AM

View Postallthumbs, on 11 April 2012 - 02:12 PM, said:

old time cowboy country chords would wok well with that. Lots of lap steel twang fill would be perfect

Thanks for having a look allthumbs, that would be cool, I was thinking along those lines that style would be perfect for this song.

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Posted 19 March 2013 - 06:13 PM

How'do Chris ;) good lyrics :yes: ............i'm surprised nobody has had a shot.........
i do get a country vibe from the lyrics, but i've got an idea for this a bit different from the obvious country vibe.......nothin fancy, no unknown yet to be played chords...........

i'll give it a wee bash, see what happens



Paul............

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Posted 19 March 2013 - 06:33 PM

View Postsheraton, on 19 March 2013 - 06:13 PM, said:

How'do Chris ;) good lyrics :yes: ............i'm surprised nobody has had a shot.........
i do get a country vibe from the lyrics, but i've got an idea for this a bit different from the obvious country vibe.......nothin fancy, no unknown yet to be played chords...........

i'll give it a wee bash, see what happens



Paul............

That would be great Paul, free free to change the lyrics if you want to as this was written quite quickly, I do quite a lot of rewrites before I'm happy :thumbup1:
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Posted 20 March 2013 - 04:39 PM

i had a first go at this, still tryin to get the lyrics out ......and the guitars are ruff too, the breaks after the chorus part are no good :no: but it gives the idea i had :D i'll need to write the words down, and i'll have another go....








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Posted 20 March 2013 - 08:46 PM

lol.......had a quick redo of the 2 guitars and the bass :) the end of the chorus part was annoying me
still needin work, but it's a bit better...............i might be able to hit that last vocal note on the chorus now......then again....maybe not....lol


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Posted 21 March 2013 - 08:30 PM

lol.....i'm gonna keep updating this as i go :) ........it's the songwriting forum anyway ;)
the third take.......new guitar tracks, bass, and vocals.......a bit closer to the feel of the idea i had

the idea is - this is the song that comes from the jam the father and son have in the the lyrics
i thought something a wee bit old and newish sounding mixed, so the guitar with lots of distortion and mostly panned right is the son, playing heavier sounding riffs, and the guitar panned mostly left with less overdrive and playing a wee bit more old school style is the dad...........and the wee jam out at the end, is the son leading with a simple riff and inspiring the dad to play along.......that's how i see it anyway

i have made a few tweaks to the original lyrics......purely to fit the music idea........and i wasn't to sure about the bad songs get to number one addition, but i needed to fill another two lines at that point, and it came out, had to drop a verse to fit the structure too ......



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Posted 22 March 2013 - 07:38 AM

This rocks, Paul - great.
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Posted 22 March 2013 - 11:03 AM

cheers Carol :)

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Posted 23 March 2013 - 06:40 AM

Nice one Paul, it does rock, thanks for doing this :thumbup1:
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Posted 26 March 2013 - 01:50 PM

Hey Chris :) ..........i had fun doing this one, it's far from the country vibe that's the obvious choice for the lyrics, but you have to go with the inspiration you get ;) reading these lyrics reminded of when i first started to play guitar, and my uncle who used to play guitar was inspired to get back into playing, we used to sit in the kitchen on Saturday nights and jam on Chuck Berry, Cream, Eagles tunes etc....... he even started a band for a while "Midlife Crisis" lol





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