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here's a wee riff idea i had for a song, not had a chance to try any vocals over it yet......i'm sure it will work ok with vocals tho :winkthumb:

thought i'd post the idea and see if anyone was interested and had any ideas......

gtr riff idea.mp3

all (well most..lol) subject matter/themes welcome, and don't worry about writing words to fit the music....this idea has a few options for melody and timing for the vocals

Paul.........

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I agree with eddie .... Great sound ! I like it . I have been working my butt off and havent had much time to very much else but work and sleep . I do have some lyric ideas floating around in my head and if i get any of them together i will post them and you can see if they work. If nothing else maybe i can post a few lines and get some ideas flowing anyway . Nice job on the playing .... This ought to make for another good one !

Johnny

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Ok paul just a real quick couple of lines im working around .......

Im just waiting on the end to come to an end

im just waiting on the hurt to start over again

Just a couple of lines from an idea im working on see if thats on the right tra k to fit the music......

Johnny

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Well here are a few more lines to go with it .....

Im just waiting on the end to come to an end

im just waiting for the hurt to start all over again

you keep dragging me down into the same ol game

i keep telling myself maybe this time you'll change

but the only time you want me is when im not around

you're so good at building me up just to kick me back down

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cheers Eddie and Johnny :winkthumb:

the drum track here is just one from the rhythm guide in my Boss BR864 8track......usually when i get a more finished idea i send all my recorded tracks as wav files to cubase 5, and use EZdrummer to build a drum track.....EZdrummer is great and real easy to use :thumbup1:

yeah i like those lyrics Johnny, pretty sure they will work :winkthumb:

not sure about the "end to come to an end" part, i like it but, not sure that it flows when singin the lines

maybe "chapter to come to an end"...... :dunno: i know that's not saying the same thing, another word for end maybe

"i'm just waiting on this ........ to come to an end" conclusion? or "waiting on my downfall to come to an end" :dunno:

Paul.....

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hey Johnny, :winkthumb:

these are lyrics i had in ma head goin with this, wasn't going to post, but they could work with what you have.... :dunno:

these hard times don't come easy,and they don't come free

you played your part in this game,yet you lay the blame on me

i'm sick and tired of being sick and tired,of these bullsh*t power plays

you say a coward just walks away,when only a fool would stay

Paul...........

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lol....post...post...post

was thinkin the chord change that comes after the main riff, if repeated would make a good chorus with your line - "the only time you want me is when i'm not around" maybe "the only time you need me is when....i'm outta town??" :dunno:

Paul........

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Yea i like the idea ... I been posting from my phone just kinda as i think of idwas . Been working toooooo much so have to get on here when ever i have a minute which r far and few between lol . I was just posting some ideas to get the ball rolling so as always you can change em as you see fit . I dont really have full lyrics down just some ideas.

Heres another couple lines to feed off maybe ....

You try to rewrite the chapters but the story's the same

you won't face the truth you always have me to blame

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Oh aye Carol :winkthumb: not been around for a bit.....need to see if i can remember how to play this, or at least mimic what's played.....i think there's potential in the lyrics tho :thumbup1: any more ideas Johnny? a few more lines could finish this off i think....

Paul.............

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Here are a few more lines - Johnny hasn't been around either so in his absence, maybe these could pad it out a bit. I do think his and your lyrics are better than these, but at least these are some lines you could mix and match to fit whatever you end up with. I'll post them in a song structure - not set in stone of course.

verse

Im just waiting on the end, to come to an end

im just waiting for the hurt, to start all over again

you keep dragging me down into the same ol' game

i keep telling myself maybe this time you'll change

Chorus

the only time you want me is when i'm not around

the only time you need me is when....i'm outta town??

verse

these hard times don't come easy, and they don't come free

you played your part in this game, yet you lay the blame on me (you can't blame it/all/that on me)

i'm sick and tired of being sick and tired, of these bullsh*t power plays

you say a coward just walks away, when only a fool would stay

Chorus

the only time you want me is when i'm not around

the only time you need me is when....i'm outta town??

verse

what is it that you want from me, I'd really like to know

(for you) nothing's ever good enough it's time for you/me to go

Nothing that I try to do, is ever good enough for you

I'm through with dancing to your tune, and that is all you (ever) want me to do

Chorus

the only time you want me is when i'm not around

the only time you need me is when....i'm outta town??

verse

I go away (and) you want me back, I stay and you want me to go

God knows, I've tried to do my best but now I'm saying NO

you say you want to stay with me but when I'm here you treat me bad

I thought our/that love would make/set us free but it only makes me sad

Chorus

the only time you want me is when i'm not around

the only time you need me is when....i'm outta town?

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