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Hey all ! I was trying to take a nap before I go to work tonight but these lyrics kept popping in my head and I knew I wouldn't be able to sleep unless I got up and wrote them down lol. It's a cross gender write for me lol .. I hear it with kind of a sassy twangy woman country singer style. :dunno: It's ruff , just jotted it down real quick.. It could probably use another verse and it needs tightening up some but I thought I'd throw it out to see what ya'll thought and if there were any takers plus I want to get some sleep lol.

8 A.M.

Remember when you told me you were gonna start treatin me right

no more runnin with your rowdy friends, no more stayin out all night

Well it must have been all empty wind, you sure didn't mean what you said

Cause here here I am this morning in this empty bed

(chorus)

Well it's eight in the morning and you're not here

It's eight in the morning and I shed my last tear

I'm on my last cup of coffee then I'm out that door

Cause as of eight in the morning I don't live here no more

Don't think you're gonna change my mind with your cowboy charm

You've started all the thunder now you'll have to ride out the storm

I'm not fallin for your smooth talkin and your crooked little smile

So save it for the next schmuck you're not even worth my while

(chorus)

Well it's eight in the morning and you're not here

It's eight in the morning and I shed my last tear

I'm on my last cup of coffee then I'm out that door

Cause as of eight in the morning I don't live here no more

Just a ruff start to see what ya'll think..

Thanks,

Johnny

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Great start Johnny - worth getting up for (tip: pencil and paper near the bedside means you don't actually have to get out of bed when inspiration strikes).

I don't know if you want it to rhyme more, but in the second verse you could have:

Don't think your cowboy charm is gonna change my mind

You promised you'd do better, now you've run (right) out of time

No more fallin for your smooth talk and your crooked little smile

So save it for the next schmuck - you're not even worth my while

As always, all suggestions are suggested for your approval/rejection etc as you see fit - whatever you think is how it should be.

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Thanks Carol . I like changes ! I was laying in bed and had the chorus part running thru my head so i just threw a couple of verses together to see how it looked ! Needs some work but i think it may have potential.

Johnny

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:brickwall: lol.... i thought i had already replied to this..

good stuff Johnny.....i initially think of a womans voice with these lyrics, but i think a man could get away with it, maybe change a few words.

i like carols' take on the second verse - changing the cowboy part for a male voice

Don't think your ANGEL EYES ARE gonna change my mind

You promised you'd do better, now you've run (right) out of time

No more fallin for your smooth talk and your crooked little smile

So save it for the next schmuck - you're not even worth my while

i like this line tho - "You've started all the thunder now you'll have to ride out the storm"

would be good to hear a male and female version

two more verses would be good

Paul

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hey Paul ! yea I agree it could be tweaked into a male version also. I was also thinking maybe a few changes on the male version and it wouldnt have to be a country song.

Johnny

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this one's a wee bit late :D

i obviously forgot about recording this one Johnny...... it was just a start - Guitar and vocal then a wee overdub lead fill at the end

just came across this while checkin some folders on my laptop.......i really should get organised.....i'm sure there's more i've forgotten about....

8am test.mp3

Paul.........

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