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song from 13 year old

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written by a 13 year old:

I was walking along a railway track, when I heard a sound

The sound was big so I though it was a train

so I put my head to the ground

the sound was getting nearer

so i quickly got outta the way

when it passed me i waved to them but i saw they didn't wanna play

got all in a heat when a passenger went my feet by tipping water all over me

said I'd get them but they laughed at me

and said 'go and and get your tea'

so i just wandered off home, so i just wandered off home

:guitarguy:

Edited by oldvic

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I like the way it sounds like it actually happened - it doesn't matter if it really did or not. i had some trouble working out the meaning of one line till I realised it was a typo:

'got all in a heat when a passenger went/wet my feet by tipping water all over me'

I'm probably the only one who's that dumb, but at least I worked it out, even if it took a couple of minutes. :)

If you wanted this to be a song, it might be an idea to try to come up with a chorus or a couple of lines to be repeated in amongst it to give it some structure to build a chord progression around. I don't think it necessarily has to have distinct verses - many songs don't even tho most do.

It's good to see people contributing ideas and lyrics - everyone should have a go!!!!

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