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#1 OFFLINE   carol m

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Posted 11 September 2010 - 09:33 PM

Here's one I wrote the other day - it's the usual 'any style, mash, change, add, not use, ignore totally' deal for the words - if you can fit the words into some music that's fantastic - tunefulness, finger-flubs, hiss etc do not matter at all. The italic lines and inside the brackets are alternatives you add or use if you want - switching lines around slightly is a good way of fitting the lines to music in a way that flows with your music.

Just have a go if you think you can - or even if you don't think you can.

Tennessee Rain

v1.
The sun is setting in Chicago
But it's raining in Tennessee
I said goodbye to the one I love
I hope she waits for me

v2
This life ain't worth the price I pay
This life is killing me
I said goodbye to the one I love
Now she's far away from me

Bridge/Chorus
Oh oh Tennessee
What can I do
I gotta break free
Oh oh Tennessee
This life is killing me

v3.
Trains and planes always take me away
(But) What can you do, there's bills to pay
My heart is breaking inside of me
And it's raining in Tennessee


v4.
I wonder what she's doing tonight
Does she ever wonder if I'm alright
Or is she out, and having fun
Dancing all night with some other one

Bridge/Chorus
Oh oh Tennessee
What can I do
I gotta get free
Oh oh Tennessee
My heart is breaking
And my life's not free
This life is taking my love from me
And it's raining (down here) in Tennessee

Outro
The sun has set in Chicago
It's still raining in Tennessee
I said goodbye to the one I love
Now she's far away from me
Oh oh Tennessee
(Yeah), I sit here looking at the falling rain
And wonder if I'll (ever) see her again
Oh oh Tennessee
I wonder, will she wait for me/ I wonder if she'll wait for me.


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#2 OFFLINE   Doug

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Posted 12 September 2010 - 08:50 AM

Amazing lyrics, Carol.
Looking forward to hearing what people come up with. I think Eddie's voice and a Hoagy Carmichael type tune would suit it well.
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#3 OFFLINE   carol m

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Posted 12 September 2010 - 10:02 AM

Steady on Doug - amazing is out of my league. :)

Thanks, tho!
One good thing about music is that when it hits you, you feel no pain - Bob Marley

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Posted 13 September 2010 - 02:14 AM

I think Doug is right. This is an excellent write. Some mods maybe dependent on the music selection. i like it !!!
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Posted 14 September 2010 - 01:56 AM

When will we hear your rendition Eddie??? :)
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Posted 14 September 2010 - 11:05 AM

Posted ImageAlmost there. Posted Image
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Posted 15 September 2010 - 02:11 AM

Carol m Work of Art

as performed by Edward Z (modified lyric)

Tennessee Rain

Capo 6th

v1.
G C G
The sun is setting low, here in Chicago
D G
But it's a raining, in Tennessee
G C G
I said goodbye, to the one I love
D G
And I'm hoping, she waits for me

v2
C G
This life ain't worth the price, I got to pay
D G
Killing me, a little more each day
G C G
I said goodbye, to the one I love
D G
I'm so lonely, when she's far away

Bridge/Chorus
C G
Oh Tennessee, so far away from me
D G
What can I do, Oh Tennessee
C G
I'm Afraid I die little more each day
D G
Got to break free, Oh Tennessee

Guitar Break

G C - G D G - G C - G D G

v3.
C G
Plains and Trains, keep taking me away
D G
What can you do, there's bills to pay
C G
My heart is breaking, deep inside of me
D G
And it's a raining, in Tennessee

v4.
G C G
I wonder what she's doing, there tonight
D G
Does she ever wonder, if I'm alright
G C G
Or is she out there, having loads of fun
D G
Or is she Dancing, with some one

Bridge/Chorus

C G
Oh Tennessee don't know, what I can do
D G
Set myself free, Oh Tennessee
C G
This life, is taking you away, from me
D G
And it's a raining in Tennessee

Outro
G C G
The sun is setting low, here in Chicago
D G
TV News said there's still rain, in Tennessee
G C G
Starring at that screen, of falling rain
G D G
Cant wait to see her, once again
C G
I wonder, if she'll wait there, just for me
D G
And it keeps raining, in Tennessee
C G
I wonder if she'll wait there, just for me
D G
But it keeps raining, in Tennessee
D G
It keeps raining in Tennessee
D G
It keeps raining in Tennessee


Done my best, hope you like it.

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Posted 15 September 2010 - 02:29 AM

Woah eddie! What a killer song you made! Are you pleased with it? You should be - I am. When I wrote it I could've chosen any other American city as it didn't have to rhyme so I thought I'd dangle the bait and it looks like I landed a song! Thanks for doing that - it's so well put together, and in record time too. Well done. :claping::winner::salute::clap:
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Posted 15 September 2010 - 03:03 AM

Carol m
You are most welcome. When I read the lyric, I knew i had to be part of this one.
Am I pleased? OMG Posted Imageyes. I do hope thats a good thing.
I did blow my lyric in spots but no more energy to try again.

I hope you liked the lyric mods as well. i did notice that the chords change positions did not stay in the right place even after I relocated them. ??????

eddie

I think there is more magic to come
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#10 OFFLINE   carol m

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Posted 15 September 2010 - 05:31 AM

I think you have to put dots....C....G.......between the chords to make them stay where you want them over the words. That's the only way I've found to anchor them where you want them to stay. I always say that people should adapt the words to fit with their music and how they want to sing it, so there's no problem about any of that.

Yes the magic to come sounds interesting. :)
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Posted 15 September 2010 - 05:45 AM

Very nicely done Eddie. Great lyrics Carol. I really enjoyed that!

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Posted 15 September 2010 - 07:32 AM

I agree with Annette. Great collaboration. That's what I was hoping to hear when I read the lyrics.
Very good production too, Eddie.
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Posted 15 September 2010 - 07:39 AM

Well done eddie.

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Posted 15 September 2010 - 11:50 AM

Thank you everybody for your kind comments. Great Lyrics make for good tunes. I enjoyed doing this one and i am happy it came out well.
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Posted 16 September 2010 - 12:06 AM

Corrections needed. Capo on 5th basic chords are G C D or no Capo and C F G .
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Posted 16 September 2010 - 12:06 PM

Great collab, very good lyrics from Carol and a very good rendition from Eddiez. But then I would expect no less from either one of these two great members.Posted Image Posted Image
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Posted 18 September 2010 - 11:09 PM

View Posteddiez152, on 16 September 2010 - 12:06 AM, said:

Corrections needed. Capo on 5th basic chords are G C D or no Capo and C F G .

Just a theory question - I know I should work it out on the guitar but then only I would know the answer - if it was capo at 1 would the chords be DGA?
Or if capo'd at 3 would the chords be EAB?

And if you wanted to have different but harmonically ok chords, say for picking out a melody line over the rhythm guitar, where would you capo, and what would the underlying chords be?

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Posted 19 September 2010 - 03:36 PM

Carol m,
If you had no capo at all
CFG other chords that can show up are Gsus4 3100xx - Csus4 3103xx - Cadd9 01003x one example.

If capo on 1
You would have to play a lot of # chords or bar chords

If capo on 3
EAD

If on the fifth
G C D

Think I got that right
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Posted 19 September 2010 - 07:59 PM

View Posteddiez152, on 19 September 2010 - 03:36 PM, said:

Carol m,
If you had no capo at all
CFG other chords that can show up are Gsus4 3100xx - Csus4 3103xx - Cadd9 01003x one example.

If capo on 1
You would have to play a lot of # chords or bar chords

If capo on 3
EAD

If on the fifth
G C D

Think I got that right
You're right, Eddie, but I'd write the Capo 3 chords as ADE just to keep them in the same I-IV-V order. Might confuse otherwise.

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Posted 15 February 2011 - 04:07 AM

Just got done listening to this collab

Very nicely done. Lyrics had that soft story touch and vocals nailed the feel of the thoughts of the writer. :winkthumb:





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