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#1 hearinvoices

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Posted 09 March 2010 - 11:48 AM

Life has a way of takin you by surprise
It can change the veiw right in front of your eyes
You've got to take lifes hand and live everyday
Just let the pieces of the puzzle fall where they may

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You've got to roll with the punches keep your head up high
don't go back to the life that you left behind
now its your turn to take back what's yours
its your time now to even up the score

you can't change now all the things that he did
please don't dwell on the stupid shit that she said
don't be a victim of their foolish games
and stay trapt and locked inside of your pain

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I wish I could have heard callin for me
I would have put an end to all your misery
But you kept it locked inside you living in fear
and the cries for help i just couldnt hear

(chorus)

I'm sorry for the pain you had to endure
At an age so young, with a heart so pure
Now you're becoming a man, you need to rise above
I'll be right here beside you with all of my love

(chorus)

This was actually a poem i wrote trying to see with it broke down like this if it would work for a song .....

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#2 hearinvoices

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Posted 12 March 2010 - 01:23 PM

Okay so I have tinkered around with the guitar on this one trying to come up with the way it could flow. Not sure if this would work or not but kinda the idea I was thinking. Have the verses a little slow and then picking it up for the chorus a little and then back down for the verses again. I'm not much on the guitar yet but just throwing it out there for an idea if there are any takers.

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#3 sheraton

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Posted 22 March 2010 - 03:57 PM

hope this is ok Johnny, i know this one has a lot of meaning to you.
as usual few dodgy bits but here it is.


cheers..Paul

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#4 hearinvoices

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Posted 22 March 2010 - 04:26 PM

You know it's good when it brings a tear to your eye !!! You've done it again Paul ! Excellent job !

#5 sheraton

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Posted 22 March 2010 - 04:50 PM

thanks Johnny,
wasn't sure if i had the right vibe.
i have to admit your lyrics brought a tear to my eyes while workin on this.

#6 hearinvoices

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Posted 22 March 2010 - 04:58 PM

Yes you nailed the vibe head on ! I keep listening to it over and over and keep getting a lump in my throat each time..... here's to ya :beer:

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Posted 22 March 2010 - 05:04 PM

same back at you :beer:

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Posted 22 March 2010 - 06:04 PM

Excellent job I thought from both sides there. The lyrics have a similar overall feel to that song by Jimmy Eat World that I did a cover of, 'The Middle', except these lyrics are a lot more involved. And Sheraton, I thought you matched the music real good to the mood of the lyrics.

Sounds brill to me.

Gordon.:clap:

#9 sheraton

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Posted 22 March 2010 - 06:25 PM

i think you may be spot on there Gordon, i forget exactly how the lyrics for 'the middle' go. going to try and find your version now.
certainly i remember hearing your version and thinking it was (as always) good listening, good excuse for another listen or 2 or 3.

Paul....

#10 hearinvoices

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Posted 22 March 2010 - 06:30 PM

I havent heard that one . I'm gonna try to find it too. Thank you for your compliments.

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Posted 22 May 2010 - 11:53 AM

THis was and excellent write and wonderfully played and sung tune.:claping: :claping: :claping: :claping:
I did not see this here before.
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Posted 23 May 2010 - 03:50 AM

Excellent song this, nice write and Pauls take really catches the vibe of the lyrics, great collab. Paul and Johnny, you two work really well together, it's cool.

Cheers

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#13 hearinvoices

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Posted 23 May 2010 - 11:12 PM

Thank you Eddie and Chris. This is one my favorite that Paul and I done. Thanks for listening !

#14 sheraton

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Posted 25 May 2010 - 07:42 PM

:winkthumb:cheers Eddie and Chris

these are great lyrics by Johnny and are the song and set the tone...i tried to just deliver and accompany them with the vibe/feel i got from them..

i like the positive message in this song ....had to be put to music

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Posted 15 November 2010 - 01:10 AM

Okay so I have tinkered around with the guitar on this one trying to come up with the way it could flow. Not sure if this would work or not but kinda the idea I was thinking. Have the verses a little slow and then picking it up for the chorus a little and then back down for the verses again. I'm not much on the guitar yet but just throwing it out there for an idea if there are any takers.





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