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Old November 17th, 2006
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A few songs that I am working on

Hi everyone I aint been around for a while { work / family } you know the drill ...

But I have been doing bit of writing though ...here are the songs I am currently working on ...

I am not a religious man but I do embrace other cultures and religious beliefs , each to their own I say , I know what I believe ..

This is the old story of the old man at the bar with his bottle of booze , it's an old theme but one I have never tried to tell in my words so here it is


God Knows

I don't know where I am going
God knows where I've been
I have never been an angel
And in my life I have sinned


I'm not much of a holy man
I don't know where to begin
You really don't want my story
As I sit here with my gin



I haven't always been this man
That you see before you now
For I used to be someone
Before I broke my vows

I don't want to know where I am going
And God only knows where I've been
I have never wanted to be an angel
And my life its' all been sin

I don't want to know where I am going
And God only knows where I've been
I have never wanted to be an angel
And my life its' all been sin
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Closed Minds

When you close your eyes at night time
Do you close your mind as well
When you dream your dreams at night time
Are your thoughts there to sell

Your politically correct speeches
Dressed in fine fancy clothes
Are your words trying to reach us
For our minds are never closed

We may not all be educated
At school some did fail
Your theories will be debated
In our homes and our jails

When you close your eyes at night time
Do you close your mind as well
when you dream your dreams at night time
Are your thoughts there to sell
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An eternal memory

So if you jump in the car
You know it ain’t that far
We can make this life
An eternal memory


There’ll be no more crying
And no more lieing
For you and for me


We can go to that spot
When we were young and so hot
For each others company


Was it really that long ago
When you never uttered the word no
That’s something I just can’t believe


So if you jump in the car
You know it ain’t that far
We can make this life
An eternal memory


There’s no bright city lights
Just a flickering candle light
Embraced is you and me


Smooth satin sheets
Feeling the heat
Radiating from you and me

We won’t have to leave
Everyone else can think
What ever they believe

So if you jump in the car
You know it ain’t that far
We can make this life
An eternal memory

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In my mind

Chorus
Quicker then a New York minute
Longer then a London hour
Sweeter then Chineese chicken
Prettier then a Siberian flower

v/1
Quicker then a New York minute
Is the length of time it will take
To bring back memories of yesterday
And those thoughts of you I’ll embrace


v/2
Longer then a London hour
Is the length of time that will take
For each and every one of those minutes
And some future memories we might make


bridge
These are the thoughts that surround me
Every time I close my eyes
For my mind is the place I long to be
There is never any sad good byes

chorus
Quicker then a New York minute
Longer then a London hour
Sweeter then Chineese chicken
Prettier then a Siberian flower


v/3
Sweeter then Chineese chicken
Are the soft kisses I miss
Dreaming about tomorrow
And those rosey lips that I’ll kiss


v/4
Prettier then a Siberian flower
Looking back at me
More beautiful then a virgin's bower
Even sexier in the mid night hour

chorus
Quicker then a New York minute
Longer then a London hour
Sweeter then Chineese chicken
Prettier then a Siberian flower

outro
Every time I close my eyes
Images of you are in my mind
Its the place I want to be
For love like your is hard to find

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Any feed back would be greatly appreciated

Trev.....

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Hey Hilch - Some great lyrics there .. any time you have chinese chickens and siberian flowers in the same sonnet has got to be a good thing ... my only thoughts reading over them; I'd to flesh them out a litlle more with a few more versus to expand on the themes and spread the chorus out .. but i am no j z . Keep jammin!

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Nice lyrics, really like closed mind and God knows... Some creative stuff there, keep it up

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Thanks for the feed back
Mjwjr and Gary

I 'm not too sure if I want to add to Closed Minds and God Knows ..mm but everytime I read them I feel something is missing ..Closed minds I have this Dylanish style in my head and God Knows I have this Soft finger picking style happening if I could play and sing I would record them but that aint going to happen till I can play a bit better ..

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Don't feel rushed to write the music for it, I mean when I was younger and I pretty muched sucked at guitar, I just wrote tons and tons of lyrics... Now I'm a accomplished guitarist for my age and am now writing a bunch of meladys with no lyrics yet, but some day I'll dig through my chest of lyrics and fit some into songs... Or something like that.

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