[Lcjones]

I wrote this sometime ago. It has gone through several versions and rewrites.

I don't have this recorded yet. I thought I'd just post the lyrics for your critique. I understand how it is sometimes difficult read a lyric and feel the emotion without the emotional drive of the music.

Let me know what you think. I'll try and make a raw recording tonight.....

Borderline
2006 Chapman Jones
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Tuning: Open D - DADFAD Capo 2 - in E
(I am tuned down a full step and capo'd on 4)

[V1]
I'm needin' to be on my way
You know i'm feeling pretty thin
I'm walking on a tight rope
Living up in the wind

[V2]
Drifting through the currents
Like a dandelion seed
No tellin' where I might land
But I'll land just where I need .... to be

[Chorus]
I gotta roll through
Keep my head up
Everything I've done
You know, seems like bad luck
But I feel a change coming on
And it's just in time
Yeah, it's just in time
The sun is crossing
The sun is crossing
The Borderline

[V3]
Out on the edge of night
Breathing declines
Nocturnal voices sing
Sending chills up and down my spine

[V4]
It takes every ounce
Of strength I have
To fight in a no-mans land
For something that I never had .... to start

[Chorus]
I gotta roll through
And keep my head up
Everything I've done
You know seems like bad luck
But I feel a change coming on
And it's just in time
Yeah, it's just in time
The sun is crossing
The sun is crossing
The Borderline

[V5]
The endless road twists and turns
It's a struggle at every bend
The world has transformed itself
Into a mess no one can mend

[V6]
Does it really matter
Is it just the way things are?
Am I fooling myself with lunacy
Should I look up and grab a star ..... to ride

[Chorus]
I gotta roll through
And keep my head up
Everything I've done
You know, seems like bad luck
But I feel a change coming on
It's just in time
Oh, it's just in time
The sun is crossing
Yes, sun is crossing
The Borderline

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...as always, thanks for getting this far...

Les

[allthumbs]

Good stuff. That first verse is a bit of a problem in the context of the rest of the tune. Tightrope = resticted choices, locked into a path. The rest of the tune is more about wandering without direction. I think that first verse as the seed of a different tune that carries on its' theme would be great. Verse 3,4, and maybe 5 would also fit the first verse in a new tune. You have two themes so split them up for 2 tunes. Tightrope vs rolling, floating.

[Lcjones]

excellent point, at..... thanks