[Doug]

It was approaching closing time. The band was playing reggae and the small dance floor was packed. The bar itself was very small - a downstairs club. I was there by myself, can't remember why. I guess I was sometimes a bit of a loner. And of course, there was a girl... She was very pretty but in a demure sort of way. Long, long beautiful dark hair. I don't know, but there was something about her that I found very attractive. She was drunk. But that wasn't it. She looked very much like a loner, seemed very shy. I just really wanted to meet her and get to know her. I watched her get up and walk towards the bathrooms. She started to sway a bit and then, bam, she fell on the floor. I hurried over to help her. I stood over her and she opened her eyes. All of a sudden, she tried to get up. Her head jerked to a stop about a foot off the ground and the came crashing back to the floor. I was standing on her hair. I stood aside and she got up and fled. Concussion and all. Never met her again.
There's got to be a song in there somewhere...

[X4StringDrive]

Just a hair short of picking her up....does sound like a song waiting in the wing

[Doug]

That was about 20 years ago. Don't know why i remembered it. Don't know why I posted it...

[knight46]

Doug,
There is a song just busting to get out of that memory. Man that is straight out of a Bogart film.

[starsailor]

Definitely a song here Doug, you've got the bar, the band, the attraction to a girl, an unfortunate accident, and wondering where she is now, perfect song material.

[Andy S]

Originally Posted by starsailor

Definitely..........you've got the bar, the band, the attraction to a girl, an unfortunate accident, and wondering where she is now, perfect song material.

Or, in the U.S.A, grounds for a civil lawsuit!!!

I wouldn't mention bar names, or too precise descriptions, but yeh, it sounds like the making of a good song. Maybe on the order of Jimmy Buffet or Randy Newman. "She ain't leaving me cuz I stood on her hair" Blues.

A long time ago I dated a girl with real long hair. She seemed to have a minor problem with getting drunk on one drink.....this wasn't in new Jersey when it happened was it!??

[X4StringDrive]

So there it was, near closing time
and I'm alone at a table for two
the reggae band was smokin hot
mixed well with my ice cold brew

The bar itself was a downstairs club
always packed the dancing floor
and there I sat, about half in the bag
when I seen her, headed for the door

She was swaying towards the bathroom
swinging her long dark beautiful hair
and I found her quite attractive
don't know why but I had to stare

Then BAM like that, she took a fall
gravity up to it's ol bag a tricks
something about abusing alcohol
brings you down, like a ton of bricks

Well, I sprang to my feet to help her
stumbled over to where she fell
I stood close as she opened her eyes
they were glazed and not looking well

As she got up, her head jerked to a stop
and went smashing, back to the ground
seems her hair had chose, the very spot
to lay where my foot came down

I stood aside containing my smile
as she took her concussion and fled
never seen her again, I wonder why
I'm sure it wasn't anything I said


Needs a chorus someone

[carol m]

My one big chance
And I threw it away
Some stand alone
But I stood on her hair

[carol m]

That chorus above would have to be after the verse that explains it. Before then you could have

You see a girl
And your hearts in a spin
You want to go over
But you know its a sin.

[starsailor]

She lies there in my memories
With silken hair beneath my feet
My mind replays the tragic scene
I think of how it could have been
Sometimes events conspire it seems
Fate rears it's head, crushes our dreams

[Doug]

That was excellent, Kenny - you made me laugh.
Carol and Chris - thanks for the choruses.

[Teddy Madison]

Well Doug, If you don't get a song out of it, ever consider writing a book? It was so well written I was anticipating the comical ending but had no idea where it was going. Very Douglas Adams.

Wayne

[eddiez152]

Sounds kinda like the the J.J.Cale tune with the same name.
The Woman that got Away. ?

[X4StringDrive]

Originally Posted by Doug

That was excellent, Kenny - you made me laugh.

That makes us even... I had a visual the whole way thru your post

[allthumbs]

My old martial arts teacher used to slam me to the ground, stand on my long hair and laugh when I tried to get up and slammed back into the ground. Hehe.