[starsailor]

This is a song I put on a few weeks ago, I've rewritten it a bit and also done a Demo, it's not perfect but I thought I'd post it, this isn't finished so any feedback is welcome

REALITY TV


They all want to be superstars
They crave publicity
A total lack of talent
Doesn’t seem to stop the dream

These people need a place to go
Where they can all be seen
The media it sees a chance
And puts them on our screens

Popstars, posers, wannabes
All there for us to see
Every body seeking fame
It’s Reality Tv

That girl you saw the other day
She’s now in Big Brother
She’s hanging with a bunch of freaks
We can sit and watch her play

A mother hears her teenage son
Singing in his room
His loved ones say you’ll be a star
It’s the Idol show for you
They didn’t have the heart to say
You cannot sing in tune

Popstars, posers, wannabes
Enjoy their misery
Every body seeking fame
It’s Reality Tv

Andy Warhol got it right
Fifteen minutes fame
But when we’re all in rehab
Who is going to take the blame?

The press want to sell papers
Programme makers want the cash
The people want the stardom
And we love a good car crash

Popstars, posers, wannabes
All there for us to see
Every body seeking fame
It’s Reality Tv

If you think you're fat
They'll make you thin
They'll make you dance
They'll make you sing
You'll eat bugs
And suffer pain
Just to be a Star again
They'll build you up
Then pull you down
Make you look like
A Circus Clown
They'll pull your strings
And cut your scenes
For the sake of high ratings

This is not reality
Just what they want us to see.

Popstars, posers, wannabes
All there for us to see
Every body seeking fame
It’s Reality Tv

Popstars, posers, wannabes
In joy and misery
Everybody seeking fame

Reality TV

©cgoodesongs--

[allthumbs]

That's coming along. I would change this line from And we love a good car crash to And we love a good train wreck. A more generic term that covers the emotional meltdowns too.

[X4StringDrive]

Nice take Chris, you've got the volume thing figured out, now its just the hiss. Was this all done with the headphone mic?

I really like the subject and how your lyrics say it all...

[knight46]

Good job Chris, vocals were very nice. I like the content of the lyrics and the flow of the piece.

[starsailor]

Thanks for having a look and listen guys, always appreciated.

allthumbs - I chose car crash because people find it hard to drive past one without sneaking a peak to see how bad it is and Reality Television is a bit the same way, I agree with the train wreck analogy though as there are a lot of casuaties from these shows.

Kenny - I just used the computer mic and the sound quality has improved a lot but the hiss is still the obstacle so I'm making progress I have the Live soundcard plugged in but I havent got a mixer, I do have a preamp but thought I needed another audio interface or can I connect to the soundcard.
Pleased you like the lyrics as well, I quite like this song so I'll try and improve it.

Youtoo, Thanks for having a look and listen I think I'm heading in the right direction, just need to fine tune a bit.

Knight. Thanks for the comments Knight and I'm glad you liked it, I just picked up the guitar and went for it so I was surprised I got to the end with so few errors, how are you getting on with your songs, they were great lyrics

All the Best

Chris

[eddiez152]

Starsailor,
Interesting lyrics, vocals need to come up more and you got it.

[starsailor]

Thanks for the feedback eddiez, I think I'm slowly getting on top of my recording issues but I haven't really had a go at mixing at all, at the moment I just play and sing at the same time and lay down one track, would it be more sensible to do the vocal and guitar tracks seperately, my Wife thinks I'm holding back a bit on my vocals and she thinks this particular song needs a bit more attitude, so I'll have to work on that.
Thanks again I always appreciate your feedback

Best Wishes

Chris

[X4StringDrive]

Originally Posted by starsailor

.....I do have a preamp but thought I needed another audio interface or can I connect to the soundcard.

Chris, what type/model preamp? I'm no authority but it should be easy enough to figure out. I would say yes you can, but I would feel better knowing what your using.................Kenny

[starsailor]

Originally Posted by X4StringDrive

Chris, what type/model preamp? I'm no authority but it should be easy enough to figure out. I would say yes you can, but I would feel better knowing what your using.................Kenny

Hi Kenny I've got an Art Tube MP Project series preamp with phantom power, it looks like quite a nice bit of kit, I also have a Shure Dynamic mic. and a condenser mic. so I've got the gear but it's the know how that's lacking.

Cheers

Chris

[X4StringDrive]

Chris, Go from output of Preamp to input on the soundblaster, looks like you will need an adapter from 1/4 to 1/8 at the soundcard input port{ their cheap, a couple of dollars}. If & when you get a mixer it will go into the mixer and from the mixer to your soundcard.

Now to cover my behind...I'm no expert as you know, so if you would feel better asking the more informed in here, please do, I'm sure you would get a much more refined response..........Kenny

[starsailor]

I have complete confidence in your knowledge Kenny and you have exactly the same soundcard as I have so I'm quite happy to go with your info and take full responsibilities for my actions, if you don't hear from me again assume somethings gone horribly wrong so I'd better say it was good knowing you just in case , I'm working on the Christmas song today so the hiss might remain until I get the adapter but you'll get an idea of where I'm going with the song, I've got the fingerstyle version and a strumming version and I hope I can have it done before christmas

[X4StringDrive]

Quote "I have complete confidence in your knowledge Kenny"

Reply "Did you bang your head on something?"...lol

Quote " if you don't hear from me again assume somethings gone horribly wrong so I'd better say it was good knowing you just in case"

Reply "Same here and please remove any links to me from your pc beforehand thankyou, I hate investigations"

Quote "I'm working on the Christmas song today"

Reply "Cool"

[tim171]

great song. i like the content and the lyrics some up todays short lived celeb lifespan, grabbing a quick buck while they can. that didn't mean to rhyme but hey!
when i first read you lyrics, i was expecting it faster, maybe rockier, but after the first verse i realised that you had the sound for your song spot on.
i think your wife is right, you sound like you have a great set of pipes on you there mate. i think you need to vent this fire in your belly, and just let go. but as some of the guys mentioned, once you have the right levels for the mix, you are not far off atall.

keep up the great work!

[starsailor]

Originally Posted by tim171

great song. i like the content and the lyrics some up todays short lived celeb lifespan, grabbing a quick buck while they can. that didn't mean to rhyme but hey!
when i first read you lyrics, i was expecting it faster, maybe rockier, but after the first verse i realised that you had the sound for your song spot on.
i think your wife is right, you sound like you have a great set of pipes on you there mate. i think you need to vent this fire in your belly, and just let go. but as some of the guys mentioned, once you have the right levels for the mix, you are not far off atall.

keep up the great work!

Thanks for the feedback Tim, I think this could work well as an electric version, I'll have to drag mine out and see, you're right I don't think I'm using my voice to it's full potential I tend to hang back a bit when I press that record button which is something I've got to overcome, I haven't sung live yet and I think that might benefit me as well.
Thanks for having a look and a listen and pleased you liked it.

All the Best

Chris

[timvass]

I really like this song.The words look like its going to be almost comedy but the tune make its meaning clear and changes the lyrics into something much darker ... love it

I should say I am no expert these are just my thoughts. I love the intro it sets the mood,and I think everybody is right about the vocal,I have the same problem (mic shy) .

I would change the guitar part a little I think.It follows the vocal so too closley when your singing ..... if you let me now what chords your using I will send you an idea of what I mean.

Please bear in mind these are just thoughts feel free to ignore and do what you think is right .Its a very personal thing this song writing lark