[Jomi]

I live and work in the north east of England and my job takes me all over the region. One day I came across a very pretty young woman lying on the ground, I tried for a while to rouse her but there was no response, I was going to phone for an ambulance when a young boy aged about 10 or 11 in a school uniform came up and told me it was ok, she was his mother and she was 'high', she'd be ok in a while. He sat beside her and stroked her hair and rubbed her hands to warm them. I walked on my way through a land of smashed bottles and boarded windows, I didn't realise at the time but it had affected me deeply, I can still picture the scene like it was yesterday.

I'd like to write more songs and I'd appreciate your comments including criticism, be gentle but don't hold back (he says, quaking).
I know that a bit of my local accent comes through in the song, is that good or bad?

thanks,

John

[allthumbs]

The local accent is perfect as is the tune. I would turn that up if I heard it on the radio. Brilliant!.You have a future in music if this is the standard of your work.

[sixtysevenmark]

very haunting melody. made the hairs stand up on the back of my neck.

[737blues]

Yep, exactly what AT said. Lovely song very well performed.

[CanuckTodd]

That was really nice Jomi. The melody fit the tone and mood of the song perfectly. Thanks for sharing the story too. I think it's great when people post originals that they share some insights about the lyrics and what the song means for them.

[Rockerbob]

Wonderful song! I enjoyed it! Nice performance and recording as well.

[juslikeplayin]

Great job Jomi.Nice playing and vocals.Very eerie knowing the story behind it.
Thanks for sharing that.What's in an accent?Some people out on your side of the globe probably figure we have an accent out this way.

[Lcjones]

That was absolutely beautiful.

The lyrical content was topical and the guitar playing very polished. You have a natural singing voice which projects and your enunciation is great. And don't even worry about any accent.

I heard Dougie McLean all over this and if I didn't know better would swear it was he himself singing and playing. And that is a compliment and thats how your melody came to me.

Based on what I've heard here you should spend every waking moment devoted to writing and creating melodies. You're a natural!

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LC

[Geyser]

Just beautiful John! I really believe your accent adds to the beauty of the song. Wish I had half your talent.

[eddiez152]

Jomi,

For this is why I'm glad to be here. A beautiful arrangment, singing and playing.
It would be ashamed not to hear more of this in the future. I hope you keep these coming. You certanly have the talent for this. If copying this is a sin, then a sinner is
what I'll be.
You have a special place in music.
Edward (eddiez)

[John Burr]

That was truly beautiful Bro! What a perfect song for my Easter afternoon. Thank you for sharing this, it simply made my day. You have a wonderful voice and the accent is perfect, Thank you so much for having the heart to write this...

BSR

[clearshadow]

That was beautiful. Great tone and the vocal's just make you listen to every word.

[Jomi]

I'm stunned by your responses, thank you all so much.

[smort]

Terrific, dont worry about the accent. Keep writing. Tap that well, you know there's a whole lot more way down deep. Good work

[chammon]

Absolutely beautiful! This one caused the room to fall silent.