[JREC]

Took another take of myself playing along to a very similar BT, but this time in A. Hopefully I did a bit better job of putting my lead out front and of following the progression...maybe? It's really sloppy cause I just did a quick take as it's getting late and didn't want to disturb the neighbors haha, but I'm anxious to see if this is where I should go, kinda--I went overboard on red-housishness for a second and wasn't really able to incorporate longer runs as some folks said I should work on, but it's not going to come overnight of course, gotta keep up the practice!... Thanks again for any comments, suggestions, or harsh criticisms

[allthumbs]

Now your lead is a bit too much in front. LOL It takes a while to get the mix right.
Your tone is a bit muddy, maybe a cleaner effect.
Your note choices did seem a bit more deliberate but, I still feel you haven't developed a melodic framework to play through so there tended to be a lot of unrelated riffing going on. It is important to hit some of the defining notes as you play over a chord progression. When you play the turn around chord, try to hit the b7th. It is the defining note.
All in all, your going in the right direction. Practice and experience will smooth things out and help you develop melodic ideas.
Hope I am not being to critical.

[JREC]

Not at all that's what I'm looking for! I get enough of people telling me I sound OK I need more people telling me what I need to fix Thanks a lot will try and work on those things!