Full song (only guitar)

Alawiggle · #1 December 30th, 2007

I've been finishing this up over the past week. It's still raw as hell (mostly because my guitar playing skills aren't up to par as I'd like them to be), but figure this is good enough to get feedback on.

It's going a little bit too fast for my taste, and I'd like to slow it down a little bit. Tell me what you think!

Tentative lyrics for it here: Horrible lyrics to be critiqued.

I guess I should add during 1:34 to 1:50 I wanna add a solo of sorts.

allthumbs · #2 December 30th, 2007

Nice. Slowing it down a touch is a good idea.

eddiez152 · #3 December 30th, 2007

Jeff,
Nice. Yes slow it down a bit. Try to hit the notes clean first. Did pretty good. Good Luck on the Lyric part to it.

krissovo · #4 December 30th, 2007

I really liked that a lot and it deserves 5 gold stars for playing with a metronome. I get a Jack Johnson meets Nirvana (well slightly grungy anyway) vibe from it

Just a tiny opinion from me is that where you intend to place the solo its too "busy" as it is with the change of rhythm and the pace you play at. I would keep/tone down the main riff and follow the lyrical melody Nirvana style for the solo and use that part elsewhere in the song.

I must admit I was not a fan of the lyrics initially but this could be a great piece from mouthing the lyrics along with your work.

As for speed, I am not sure. I would slow it down for now but once you really crack the guitar piece work then on speeding it up slightly.

I will keep my eye out for this one in the future.

Alawiggle · #5 December 30th, 2007

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Originally Posted by krissovo

I really liked that a lot and it deserves 5 gold stars for playing with a metronome. I get a Jack Johnson meets Nirvana (well slightly grungy anyway) vibe from it

Just a tiny opinion from me is that where you intend to place the solo its too "busy" as it is with the change of rhythm and the pace you play at. I would keep/tone down the main riff and follow the lyrical melody Nirvana style for the solo and use that part elsewhere in the song.

I must admit I was not a fan of the lyrics initially but this could be a great piece from mouthing the lyrics along with your work.

As for speed, I am not sure. I would slow it down for now but once you really crack the guitar piece work then on speeding it up slightly.

I will keep my eye out for this one in the future.

Thanks, the speed I definitely want to slow down. I only played it as fast as I did so that it would "scrunch" together and mistakes wouldn't be as noticeable so I could get some feedback on it initially.

Thanks again.

X4StringDrive · #6 December 30th, 2007

I liked the speed, grooved right along nice IMO, but then again all I can play is slow at the present....nice job Alawiggle

knight46 · #7 December 30th, 2007

That was good Alawiggle, nice sound.

Ian McAllister · #8 December 31st, 2007

Jeff, you got it goin' on. I'm curious as to how the melody will work out, try to get some peaks in there without following the guitar line too much. Good work!
Ian

Alawiggle · #9 December 31st, 2007

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Originally Posted by Ian McAllister

Jeff, you got it goin' on. I'm curious as to how the melody will work out, try to get some peaks in there without following the guitar line too much. Good work!
Ian

Do you mean melody of the guitar solo, or the lyrics?

If you mean the guitar solo, I'm waiting for my copy of PlaneTalk to get arrive. I actually made this whole song based around the (small) amount of ideas I was able to grab about the book from the PT forums which I got access to. :-p

tomg123 · #10 December 31st, 2007

Interesting sound, be cool to see how your final lyrics fit. I was
expecting a more sad sounding piece when i saw the lyrics

Ian McAllister · #11 December 31st, 2007

'Do you mean melody of the guitar solo, or the lyrics?'
I meant the lyrics, but it's nice to see that you equate guitar solo and melody. Often, and I'm as guilty as the next in this, the solo is just an excuse to noodle about.
Looking forward to hearing more,
Ian

Alawiggle · #12 December 31st, 2007

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Originally Posted by Ian McAllister

'Do you mean melody of the guitar solo, or the lyrics?'
I meant the lyrics, but it's nice to see that you equate guitar solo and melody. Often, and I'm as guilty as the next in this, the solo is just an excuse to noodle about.
Looking forward to hearing more,
Ian

Some of my favorite solos come from the guys who use it as melody. I'm not too fond of the really fast guys. David Gilmour is my hero cause he uses notes carefully and with emotion. Although, just jamming is awesome too.

starsailor · #13 December 31st, 2007

Hi Alawiggle nice job, the tune was a bit lighter than I thought it would be but it's great, the slowing down is a good idea but not too much the lyrics are quite dark and a lighter arrangement lifts the mood a little bit, it depends what you want to take centre stage, if you listen to Leonard Cohen songs the lyrics are at the fore front and are dark but theres a good melody running behind them which makes the whole song go at a good pace, you have this here and the tune lifts the oppressive atmosphere of the lyrics, lyrics like these can turn into a dirge if the right approach isn't taken and you have taken the right approach.