In need of lyrics....

Nutty · #1 September 27th, 2008

for a "happy song". I tend to be an emotional writer, so my songs on a bit of a dark/depressing side, but I try to include a postive message (e.g we have the power to change our life/self, etc.).

So, my husband and kids are after me to write a happy song. While working on another song the other day, I came up with a great chord progression for a chorus and a very upbeat style. My daughter loved it (she is usually very critical about my songs), so I decided I should come up with a song with that style. Also, I can't just sit down and say "I'm going to write about blah blah blah...the tune and/or lyrics just hit me.

If anyone is interested in doing a collab, I can send you a little piece of the "happy style" with the depressing lyrics.

Now I have a few songs on the go, so I'm not sure when I'll actually get to it, but I'd like to get my ideas down so I don't at least forget them.

Thanks.

Nutty

starsailor · #2 September 28th, 2008

I quite like the happy tune with the depressing lyrics idea Nutty but if you want happy lyrics I don't mind helping out, if you post the tune we could all chip in and write a happy song for you

Nutty · #3 September 28th, 2008

Thanks Chris,

This came about in my remixing of "Let Me Out". I had to drop one of the verses so I ended up with a instrumental section that I couldn't come up with any guitar ideas, so I thought I was put in a vocal bridge. This is what I came up with. I ran it past a few people and the consensus was that it didn't fit in. My daughter loved that part though, so I thought I would make another song out of it. The section in here would be the chorusl. I haven't thought about verses yet. Oh the lead in to the section starts about the 2 minute mark.

Nutty

Nutty · #4 September 28th, 2008

Oops..forgot the attachment again.

Nutty

starsailor · #5 September 29th, 2008

Nice remix on this song Nutty, not too sure if the bridge doesn't fit in I liked it personally didn't make me think what's going on here, nice production on this, the bridge lifted the song but it's about someone seeking friendship who wants to belong on their terms, I want to fit in but I'm not willing to compromise a lot to do it so take me for who I am, that's a pretty positive message so the song works, I suppose it's down to how the listener interprets the song, do you think the Bridge works in the song

Nutty · #6 September 29th, 2008

Glad you mentioned that Chris. I didn't think it was that bad. I like the lyrics best because whole purpose of this bridge is to set the listener up for verse 4 which basically says that they hold the key to what happens to them. Verse 3 says they're going to deal with what ever. The bridge gives an idea of what they are dealing with. There was method to my madness here lol.

At the present time, I used the chords of the bridge but changed it back to the same style as the rest of the song. Maybe I'll try singing as the bridge to that style and see how it sounds.

Maybe I should get opinions if you think it's not so bad. I thought it fly. My daugthers both liked it and the one daughter's boyfriend too.

I'm going to record that section now with the original style to see if that's better.

Thanks for listening Chris.

Nutty

knight46 · #7 September 29th, 2008

Nutty,
That sounded pretty good to me, I thought it fit pretty good.

Nutty · #8 September 29th, 2008

Thanks knight for listening.

How does this version fit? I left the bridge in but left it as the same style as the rest of the song. I don't think it sounds a lot different from the other version.

I just whipped this together for opinion. If I keep this version I well redo the vocals, add guitar work, etc.

Thanks.
Nutty

X4StringDrive · #9 September 29th, 2008

Nice job Nutty, Thought it worked fine IMO.

carol m · #10 October 1st, 2008

I thought it worked well too. I didn't find it didn't fit at all.

Nutty · #11 October 1st, 2008

Thanks Kenny and Carol.

I'm going to keep it in for now. It seems to change daily though. I definitely perfer adding lyrics then coming up with a guitar solo (my weakness).

Thanks for listening.

Nutty

knight46 · #12 October 1st, 2008

Nutty,
I just listened to version 14B and thought it work OK, fit was good.

Nutty · #13 October 1st, 2008

Thanks for listening Knight...glad you liked it. Hopefully I will have a final version soon. I'm beginning to think that there is never a final version in songwriting.

Nutty

tomg123 · #14 October 3rd, 2008

Just listened to the latest, thought it was well put together and thought through. I remember this tune from awhile back i think. Anyway try adding a few solo bits maybe as iceing on the cake

Nutty · #15 October 3rd, 2008

Quote:

Originally Posted by tomg123

Just listened to the latest, thought it was well put together and thought through. I remember this tune from awhile back i think. Anyway try adding a few solo bits maybe as iceing on the cake

You are right Tom. This song has been kicking around for awhile. I wrote it in January and did a couple of versions but I wanted to do a better job of it since I had learned a lot since then. I also started using a new DAW in April that has had a huge learning curve, so I'm just getting to it now. Hopefully it will pay off in the end.

Adding the few solo bits is definitely my weakness, but I'm going to try to come up with something.

Thanks for listening.

Nutty