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June 27th, 2008
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Lyrics needed
As you can hear, I'm at a loss as to the verses here. Any suggestions would be welcome. Note that this is a very rough draft, but there are, IMHO, some nice moments.*
Ian
*and many horrible minutes!!!
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June 29th, 2008
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Hi Ian, that's a catchy tune alright. My first thoughts are, if it was 'C'mon walk back home with me' instead of 'Someone walk etc' you would have more options for lyrics. For example promising all the benefits you could offer the person (endless scope) and the reasons why they should - i.e. make it into a love song/proposition instead of a 'lonely person plea'? Don't know if that helps - hope so anyway
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June 29th, 2008
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Thanks Carol, I'm really stuck with it. I keep coming back to the same tired lines. Your input is, as always, much appreciated.
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Hey Great tune Ian, reminds me of Elvis Costello and the attractions, linking into what Carol said, I think you could go along the lines of a couple having an argument and the girl walking out then the guy going to find her and saying come back home I'm sorry this is what you mean to me we can get through this don't know if that's what you're looking for but it's the feel I got, the chorus is there Come on take a walk back home with me, just a question of building the verses round it, have you got the words you have written down if you could post them we can fill in the spaces, then you can pick out what you like and discard what you don't it's a cool tune.

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Good idea Chris. Or even not an argument but to a girl you've just met 'Come home with me and I will spoil you rotten/make you happy ever after/love you/adore you/ etc etc etc approach, (make you endless cups of tea?? - rhymes with 'me'  )
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A nice one as always Ian!Great job,congratulations  !As I was listening to your song,I was imagining the lyrics.I don't know how you pictured the whole idea,but for me,as the song is joyfull,I would think to cook up something about a guy on a beach,having a walk by the seaside,drinking a beer,watching the people having fun and listening to music with his earphones while suddenly he sees this beautiful"angel"shining like the sun...Too bad I have never tried out lyrics,otherwise i would give it a go  ...Sorry if I tired you...Good luck with the collaboration and finding the lyrics...
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Here you go:
Sometimes check out
Don't eat cheap
They just grab out and sin
Sometimes creep mounts
Run very green
Without even crusting the sound
Believe the gotcha in your back
Don't let your's go
Believe show that pattern
Below they've got to show
Daddy had a zip on a big yellow line
Mama had a fault which tore up the time
Sister goes to church and falls asleep
Brother waxes on and goes out deep
Yeah...Yeahh
Yeah...yeah
Yes, yes, yes it does
Why don't you say much after that?
Ohhhhhh, Ohhhh
Can you see it
Yes I can't
You aren't blind
Yeahhhh
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July 2nd, 2008
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Thanks everyone, TC, I'm trying to work your lyrics in as we speak.
Ian
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hey IAn another catchy sounding track, look forward to hearing more as it comes along.
way over in the minor key
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July 15th, 2008
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Ian,
Just found this, nice tune, great feeling. Could you post the lyrics that you have, I can follow easier if I am reading the lyrics as I listen to the tune.
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July 23rd, 2008
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Ian,
That sounded very much like the 60's style music. Nice.
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Hi guys, sorry I haven't been able to reply for a while, with moving around my internet access has been a little sporadic.
Knight, I haven't really got any existing lyrics, apart from 'If you're lost then I will find you, look around I'm right behind you' and 'Come on take a walk back home with me' and I still haven't done any more work on it. It does have a nice 60s groove to it though Eddie, thanks for the reply.
Ian
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July 31st, 2008
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Quote:
Originally Posted by tender crisp
Here you go:
Sometimes check out
Don't eat cheap
They just grab out and sin
Sometimes creep mounts
Run very green
Without even crusting the sound
Believe the gotcha in your back
Don't let your's go
Believe show that pattern
Below they've got to show
Daddy had a zip on a big yellow line
Mama had a fault which tore up the time
Sister goes to church and falls asleep
Brother waxes on and goes out deep
Yeah...Yeahh
Yeah...yeah
Yes, yes, yes it does
Why don't you say much after that?
Ohhhhhh, Ohhhh
Can you see it
Yes I can't
You aren't blind
Yeahhhh
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pretty wild lyrics, TC - post some more.
Ian - catchy tune - you need convincing drums to bring it alive and maybe more interesting sound from your guitar. But it's worth working with. Especially with TC's lyrics - they're quirky enough to really work.
"we don't see things as they are, we see things as we are" - Anais Nin
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