Hey M-Rocks,
I hope you didn't "file 13" your lyric based on my reply. That certainly was and "is" not my intent.
There are several song writers on the board and that will be more than happy to help!
As far as an outline to songwriting, well, suffice it to say there are a million reams written on the subject and a million different opinions to go with them.
As a first step, there is no right or wrong way to write a song.
Second step, there are rules and formulas for writing songs.
Third step, when you know the rules, you can break them anyway you want!
If you want, keep you lyric, don't discard it. I'd be willing to work with you on it.
Understand though, that writing a lyric, while as simple as some lyrics seem, is a tough job. But as the Great Red Green would say, "we're in this together. I'm pullin' for ya".
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