I have kinda taken this on as a learning exercise for me, as much as for her.
And since i couldnt sleep last night i went through and put some comments throught the original song she sent me, and also had a rough (very rough) crack at rewriting it into something, that i can at least help her with musically as she asked me to do.
This wont let me attach word documents, so heres a link to the two
fukawi-1.4t.com/comments.doc - This is my comments throughout her original song
fukawi-1.4t.com/revise.doc - this is me farting about with it, and trimming it back to a more concise song, removing the lines just for filling time, and such. But also trying to keep to the original as much as i could, which isnt easy when i didnt write it in the first place.
I dont know weather my friend will see these or not, its mainly more for my own experience...
Thanks guys