It reminds me of I Won't Back Down. I can't put my finger on what is happening with the first verse. In my opinion it just doesn't flow. It may be the cadences . I would have to spend a couple of days playing with that verse to figure out what is bothering me about it and i don't have the time to do that. I have written and erased the next sentence in this post 4 times. Wish I had the time to figure it out. I would be very interested to hear what your mentor thinks of this tune.
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