This might work. The first line still gives it the religious overtones of the original verse. Now I will post it with all the changes and you can keep what you like and throw out the rest.
And as the fog lifts high
He knows (the) end is nigh-- his
Now through the light he has seen
He’s not the man he should of been
A redemption came on angels wings
B At last he's earned his peace
A False pride was just an empty thing
BAnd now he's at ease.
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