Thanks, metalkour and Allthumbs.
I think you're right, Allthumbs. There needs to be a transition to get you from the personal to the general.
One thought for a transition verse (that doesn't quite work for me) is...
God turns lonely eyes away
now the predator becomes the prey
nothing really is as it seems
there's fear in your eyes at the end of my dreams
I kinda like it but it moves me away from the connection to whatever it is in the cave or at the end of my dreams (or whatever) that the last verses talk about.
Thanks for your patience, everyone. I know it's a little over the top - not your average love song.
-Doug
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