Thanks for the feed back Allthumbs
I might try to explain some of your questions ..
We were only very young -- You don't need the word only
I used only to get 5 sylabills in the line so that the next line also has 5 sylabills ..
Not knowing what would become- You need to settle on a rhyming scheme. It seems
I thought one could use inperfect rhymes ?
For all our ...blood sweat and tears -why blood, sweat and tears?
Blood from our hearts , sweat in making a family it's hard work raising kids , Tears will always be tears when one is in love
The perfect skies have now disappeared - this verse contradicts love calms our fears
Following the chorus which speaks of raising the family
( and everything that goes with that )
The narrator is speaking of the present actually right now ,,which ties into the following verse ..
I don't think it actually contradicts the calming of the fears , to me it is more of a realality check ...
Married couples do have alot of bad times as well as good ones ( or is that just me ?)
Hope that clears things up mate appreciate the feed back
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