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Old July 6th, 2006
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Hi Les,
Firstly, let me say, I'm fairly new to songwriting and I am finding your songs and reviews very helpful in my endeavours to build my craft. Thanks for sharing them with us.

So I don't feel qualified to give a full technical review yet so I will just stick to the bits which leap out at me as a listener.

This one works well for me except for the line
"or wastin time with a fence"

The image this conjures up is hangin around with someone who trades in stolen goods
If you are trying to portray indecision, would
"wastin time on a fence"
work a bit better?

The other verses and the chorus are all spot on, as is the guitar work

Cheers

Peter

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