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I just spent 2hours working on your lyrics and then my computer hung and I lost it all. So here is just the changes without the detailed explanation. I changed the bridge because it didn't fit the rest of the tune and the rewritten bridge builds on the verse before it and puts a completely new twist on the chorus. Some changes I made because a word was interrupting the flow. Other lines I changed to make it more personal, clearer or easier to sing. I kinda made it into a more positive uplift kind of thing. I see this as a rock ballad sung bu Nancy Wilson of Heart. Hope I can remember the changes. Here goes.



Verse:
You took what was left of me
I was just an empty space in the dark
my love for you was real
but, you stepped upon my heart

I cried for you in the night
but you found someone new
the tears were rolling down my face
my reality check was due

Chorus:

I can’t believe somebody
could make me feel The Pain
that cut my body down
that shed my blood like rain

Verse:
You’ve made me a stronger woman
I’ll always love you for that
I’ve put the pieces back together
my soul is no longer trapped

I’ve let go of all of the anger
and finally seen the light
my love was never wasted
There was no need to fight

Chorus:

I can’t believe somebody
could make me feel The Pain
that cut my body down
that shed my blood like rain

Bridge:
I'm standing on my own two feet
I give my love to whom I choose
If they don't want to give it back
Then their the ones who lose.

Chorus:

I can’t believe somebody
could make me feel The Pain
that cut my body down
that shed my blood like rain


As you can see the bridge turns the focus, that is suggested in the preceding verse, from him hurting you to wondering how you could allow yourself to be hurt. Goes from being a victim to being in control. It is just an idea.
I felt the constant references to pieces of a body was a little too blood metal unless that's what you were going for.. I think this tune has great potential and just needs to be polished. Hope some of this helps. BTW Nancy Wilson singing this.
would sound awesome.