Hi, just wanted to say I would be thrilled for my husband to write me a song like this. Hilch, you may decide to change some things but it is a wonderful start!
Les, your suggestions sound great. Here are a few inexperienced opinions on your changes though.
Would "
Waking to your lovely charms" sound more like staying in bed, than "rising"?
And just me personally, I like the phrase "silky face" better than "charming cheeks". I don't know, silky face sounds llike a nicer compliment. Maybe just take the "soft" out of "soft silky face" to help with the singing.
Whatever you decide, I'm sure it will be great, Hilch.
