Good stuff. That first verse is a bit of a problem in the context of the rest of the tune. Tightrope = resticted choices, locked into a path. The rest of the tune is more about wandering without direction. I think that first verse as the seed of a different tune that carries on its' theme would be great. Verse 3,4, and maybe 5 would also fit the first verse in a new tune. You have two themes so split them up for 2 tunes. Tightrope vs rolling, floating.
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