Well, the Songwriting forum has been incorporated into the
Workings of Music.
I'll break in with a new lyric for your review and critique. Hammer it..
Don't hold back!
This is a first draft lyric along with a raw recording .... really raw .... i mean, like sushi
I'm A Poet
Chapman Jones - ASCAP 042006
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http://croakingfrogmusic.com/mp3/im_a_poet.mp3
[Verse 1]
I'm writing a poem
Just for you
One that will last your
Whole life through
I'm putting pen to paper
To romantically entwine
the words that best describe you,
I hope you don't mind
[Verse 2]
You're the oddest girl this side of the world
[yeah] You're a walking quirk
I don't know what made you so dumb
But girl, it really works
I've studied all the anatomy books
From Grays to Dr Suess
They all tell me you should have one face
But baby you've got two
[Chorus]
I'm a poet
And don't cha know it
I can make words rhyme
I don't need a college degree
For the words I need to find
When it comes down to writing
How you've touch my soul
My ink pen drips with poetry
Like a drunkard on parole
[Verse 3]
I'd like to take a moment
And talk about your hair
But I've got no clue what color it is
Did you do that on a dare?
Your perfume's supposed to smell real sweet
And turn your man to mush
but the aroma that comes wafting by
Is like someone forgot to flush
[Verse 4]
You're a wacked out gal from southern cal
With tattos where they don't belong
Your ears are pierced 400 hundred times
With rivets a half foot long
I've got to write one last line
Before this poem is done
Yer the dadburn cutest thing i've seen
Under the sun
[Repeat Chorus]
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an like always, thanks for getting this far.
Les