[starsailor]

+1 to what X4String said, it is a bit difficult to give a critique as it seems a bit random at the moment, the words are good but I'm not getting the message, I'm just guessing, it's about death in some way, maybe suicide, running away, bullying along those lines but I could be wrong what kind of music do you want to put to it? the lines are good and it will make up into a good song but it needs something to give the song clarity so that people can relate to it on some level.