[starsailor]

Originally Posted by johnnydoxx

Nice job - can feel the varied sensations of being at a remote campsite alone.

Just one minor comment - 'the place where Legends dwell' is not foretold or hinted by the preceding lyrics. Maybe some cues above would help bring it into the song. Or if you write one, a chorus could relate it into the rest.

I agree that is a great line and it makes the reader/listener want to know more so it can lead into another verse or into the chorus, that line really sets the song up it's a great hook.