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Originally Posted by X4StringDrive
Nice story Chris, I like it!
Don't like "hole" in the 3rd verse, doesn't sound right....how do you wipe a hole? maybe ....
he goes to the window, wipes the haze...
Other place I'm not fond of is "Jennifer" someone who's not familiar with naming guitars would wonder about that line I think.....
never named mine before.....guitar that is 
I think it could work out very nice with the right arrangement |
Hi Kenny thanks for the feedback, good pick up on the words there in retrospect I think they're a bit obscure, I don't know if they do it in the USA but when shops shut down in the UK they paint the window out and scrape Closing Down in big letters across it so that reference was to the guy scraping the paint off the window between the words, I now realise that could be lost in translation. The Jennifer referred to Donovan's song Jennifer Juniper maybe I was being too clever there so that can be changed too, I was going to put Strums some Pete Seeger but Jennifer jumped into my head, actually I've still got the song in my head, Donovan is a great songwriter.
Glad you liked it just needs a tweak or two
All the Best
Chris
You don't stop laughing when you grow old; you grow old when you stop laughing.