I really like this song.The words look like its going to be almost comedy but the tune make its meaning clear and changes the lyrics into something much darker ... love it
I should say I am no expert these are just my thoughts. I love the intro it sets the mood,and I think everybody is right about the vocal,I have the same problem (mic shy) .
I would change the guitar part a little I think.It follows the vocal so too closley when your singing ..... if you let me now what chords your using I will send you an idea of what I mean.
Please bear in mind these are just thoughts feel free to ignore and do what you think is right .Its a very personal thing this song writing lark
