[starsailor]

Hi Alawiggle nice job, the tune was a bit lighter than I thought it would be but it's great, the slowing down is a good idea but not too much the lyrics are quite dark and a lighter arrangement lifts the mood a little bit, it depends what you want to take centre stage, if you listen to Leonard Cohen songs the lyrics are at the fore front and are dark but theres a good melody running behind them which makes the whole song go at a good pace, you have this here and the tune lifts the oppressive atmosphere of the lyrics, lyrics like these can turn into a dirge if the right approach isn't taken and you have taken the right approach.