I really liked that a lot and it deserves 5 gold stars for playing with a metronome. I get a Jack Johnson meets Nirvana (well slightly grungy anyway) vibe from it
Just a tiny opinion from me is that where you intend to place the solo its too "busy" as it is with the change of rhythm and the pace you play at. I would keep/tone down the main riff and follow the lyrical melody Nirvana style for the solo and use that part elsewhere in the song.
I must admit I was not a fan of the lyrics initially but this could be a great piece from mouthing the lyrics along with your work.
As for speed, I am not sure. I would slow it down for now but once you really crack the guitar piece work then on speeding it up slightly.
I will keep my eye out for this one in the future.
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