Hi, AX. I had a listen to your track. I has a nice vibe and feel to it.
My critique:
First of all, the backing track. The bass line is fudging out the chords the guitar is strumming, so right off the bat, you're going to have trouble with any melody. The chords are Em to Am then a brief Bm on the way back to the Em. The bass however isn't really underpinning those chords in a strong bass-like manner; it's playing its own melody, limiting the melodic possibilities on top.
As you know, I really do like to hear a melody line nailing those chord tones. You must also know that I don't mean JUST stick to chord tones, but that those main melody notes, the strong ones, the ones you resolve to, should be chord tones. The parts that I found not as pleasing in your melodic excursion were those parts where you failed to nail them.
For example: Your opening line over the Em ... beautiful; then, however you resolve that line by ending on a D, but the chord at that point changes to the Am (0:17). So now you're playing a sus4 note over the Am, but the flat 3 is ringing away in the chord of the backing track, a not-so-nice clash.
This happens several times throughout. My other criticism (you asked!) is that for most of it, you seem to be relying on a fretboard pattern and muscle memory for your lines rather than a conscious quest for melody. That's going to get you in trouble all the time.
My advice:
1: Work on the backing track. Make those change very definite by simplifying the bass line. Play roots under those chords and make them change with the chords. Don't worry about melody on the bottom end, that's what your lead is going to do. Keep those bass notes sparse, simple and to the point. That Am chord, for example ... the bass plays a 5 under the first beat (an E note). Makes it hard to hear that change. Also, that brief Bm chord could do with a B note under it to make it clear that's what's happening. I did a quick midi example of what I'm talking about for you, attached below. The bass line is playing roots and 5s, the 'standard' bass line. (I'm not saying melodic bass lines are bad or anything, but it's complicating the issue in this case.)
2: Follow the changes, always know what that underlying chord is and when it's changing to the next. Build your lines by starting and ending lines with chord tones. If your line ends on the first beat of a measure with a new chord, then look to that chord's tones for the note, not the previous measure.
3: Force your hands/fingers not to simply move through known scale patterns. Don't play anything rather than do that. I can hear that you're often in the midst of trial and error, hoping for the best. You don't need that, you need to be sure, to know in advance that what you're playing is working. Chord tones are the easiest way to approach that. Work on seeing them for each chord and using them to outline your lines. Either that, or work on knowing which they are in the scale patterns you're using and making sure they match the chord(s) of the moment.
I hope I haven't been too harsh, but you did ask.
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