Went ahead and broke this down.....
ended up only breaking down the first stanza but I did a dry run of a couple of the verses/chorus just to let you know how I hear the song in my head... mind you I'm hitting a lot of flat notes but this is just to give you guys a more detailed view of how I hear it.
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Originally Posted by starsailor
I thought I'd wade in with X4String and have a go at this 006, I'v had a bit of trouble deciphering your train of thought but X4String has unjumbled things a bit, all your ideas have just landed on the page in a constant stream of thought which is pretty cool but it's now a process of constucting it, so here's my attempt, don't worry if you don't like it, it's more an attempt to help you find a direction for the song, hope it helps in some way.
I've taken the last verse on Kenny's post and used it as the chorus, if that's ok, I've also rearranged the words and added a couple but the majority of the words are still there as they belong to you.
The Prize
V1
Life's so deceiving
The purpose the meaning
Always chasing the prize --Sing this line and the previous one in your head... seems like always doesn't fit in there not sure what else to put or take it out but it doesn't seem to flow.... thinking as I write here but what if we switch this line and the next one... gives the first three lines a little more fast of a fast pace but it flows better
What they made us believe in
Like this
Life's so deceiving
The purpose the meaning (pause)
What they made us believe in
V2
The prize is the chase
A chase to the end
No time doesn't wait
While we waste away
Chasing the prize
The purpose the meaning
CHORUS
They make you believe
The words they do bend
But the prize is the chase
The chase to the end
V3
We're programmed to love
To love and to hate
Is that our destiny
Our only true fate
V4
Will the chase ever end
No it never does
But we don't give up
Keep proddin' and pokin'
With our useless attempts
We keep tryin' and hopin'
CHORUS TO END
They make you believe
The words they do bend
But the prize is the chase
The chase to the end
The prize is the chase
The chase to the end
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