[Paul Jeffs]

Ok.. weekends upon us again..its cold and rainy here and so incase anyone else finds themselves inside...s looking for somthing to do.. i'd thought i'd throw a couple of starting points into the pot.. have a good weekend all..

a) Those of you whove read my intro on this forum will know i'm into photography.. so how about using this photo of mine for inspiration.. its a standard sunset piccy so a tune shouldnt be too hard to come by...

Sunset

b) I picked up one of my old verses last night determined to finish it.. Its just about there so i'd thought i'd offer it up for sacrifice...

Been there, Seen it, Done it
=====================

Well ive been there, seen it, done it,
Ive heard it all before,
Dont even bother trying,
Your lies dont work anymore,
Yes ive lived it, breathed it, run it,
A hundred times and more,
Everytime ive finished,
Much worse of than before.

You played with fire but baby
Its my heart that got burned,
The same story a thousand times
Youd think by now i'd learned,
No happy ever after,
No Fairytail 'I Do',
For every time love comes my way,
It reminds me of you.

Ive had it and ive lost it,
thats just the way it goes,
Flying through the high times,
Crawling through the lows,
Im up, i'm down, i'm all around,
I'm so messed up i know,
I walk alone in the pits of hell,
Ive no where left to go.

Well ive been there, seen it, done it,
Ive heard it all before,
Dont even bother trying,
Your lies dont work anymore,
Yes ive lived it, breathed it, run it,
Round fifty blocks or more,
Crossed the track, not coming back,
Walked out and shut the door.

[Paul Jeffs]

Originally Posted by tomg123

Thanks fly and carol

Fly, don't know if it was what paul was lookin for, maybe something more electric and bluesy.

Tom, admittedly it wasnt what was in my head when i started it.. but i like the version none the less..

Originally Posted by tomg123

Also my eqipment isn't as good as most peoples so maybe i should wait before joining these collabs?...anyway i realized the first verse is kinda like
the last so i should of made those the chorus, i could
always switch things around.

I put my lyrics up for fun so feel free to play... the more people that take part the more fun it is..and its good to hear different versions.

[tomg123]

Originally Posted by Paul Jeffs

Tom,

Thanks for picking this one up. Nice to hear your version of it. I'm intreagued as to how others read/hear the lyrics when they see them.. and if they read them in the same tempo/rythem as i heard them when i wrote them... Two people have mentioned a blues type feel to them which is cool. Whilst i'm not a blues man myself as such, its still a nice take on what i had originally thought.. Nice one

Thanks paul, its just kinda my style for writing (up till this point)
using a chourus and verse. I can try what you said to fly tho,i have
a couple days off next week (if nothing else comes up) i do like
the lyrics. In the meantime we can see where it goes, maybe a couple different versions would be cool

[Paul Jeffs]

for sure.. its great to hear different interpretations of the lyrics.

[knight46]

Paul,
I posted this in the wrong thread, but this is my interpretation of your lyrics with vox only.

[Paul Jeffs]

Originally Posted by knight46

Paul,
I posted this in the wrong thread, but this is my interpretation of your lyrics with vox only.

Hiya Knight,

Unfortunatly I'm unable to listen to this at work... and wont be home now until early next week (have to travel to a wedding in Sunny Scotland ....).. so it will be a while before i get to hear this properly. Look forward to hearing it then though.

[AX7221]

The other day I came up with the music for the first two verses, however it wasn't until today that I realized pitch problems aren't a quick fix

First off, I should let everyone know that this is the first time I've tried to write a song, not just music to jam with, so the reason I only have 2 verses is b/c I'm not sure what to do, hopefully you all can help me out. I have different music for the first and second verse b/c I got a different feel from the first and second verses, the first verse is to the point and the second is more reflective. So after I finished doing the second verse I realized I didn't know what to do for the 3rd verse. The first and 4th are the same and there's no chorus, so should I do all 4 verses differently, or modify the music to just 1 verse?

For the vocals I intended for them to start after 8 bars or at the 12 sec mark, and b/c its 160 bpm I alloted each line 2 bars, basically so things will line up. I did the three lines: "Yes ive lived it, breathed it, run it," "Everytime ive finished," and "It reminds me of you." differently for those lines. The first two above are three short strums with space in between and the third one is sustained notes. Enjoy!

[Paul Jeffs]

Hey Ax,.. Good to hear from you again.

I have reworked the lyrics a bit, Too many people have said about it needing a chorus so ive pushed the 1'st verse to a chorus and added a new first... basically we now have 3 verses 3 choruses.. I dont know if the pattern youve got for what we were kicking around in the chat room matches (i cant listen to it yet as I am at work for a few more hours yet).. but heres the reworked lyrics so far..... I'll listen to the MP3 when I get home tonight!


Been There, Seen It, Done It
======================

Do you remember how we started,
Every second chance i gave,
The love that you witheld from me's
The addiction that I craved
You kept going till you broke me,
left me crumpled on the floor
You'd pick me up to knock me down,
Well honey not no more.

Cos.....Ive been there, seen it, done it,
Ive heard it all before,
Dont even bother trying,
Your lies dont work anymore,
Yes ive lived it, breathed it, run it,
A hundred times and more,
Everytime ive finished,
So much worse of than before.

You played with fire but baby
Its my heart that got burned,
The same story a thousand times
Youd think by now i'd learned,
No happy ever after,
No Fairytail 'I Do',
For every time love comes my way,
It reminds me of you.

Ive been there, seen it, done it,
Ive heard it all before,
Dont even bother trying,
Your lies dont work anymore,
Yes ive lived it, breathed it, run it,
A hundred times and more,
Everytime ive finished,
So much worse of than before.

Ive had it and ive lost it,
thats just the way it goes,
Flying through the high times,
Crawling through the lows,
Im up, i'm down, i'm all around,
I'm so messed up i know,
I cant turn back, I cant move on,
Ive no where left to go.

Well ive been there, seen it, done it,
Ive heard it all before,
Dont even bother trying,
Your lies dont work anymore,
Yes ive lived it, breathed it, run it,
Round fifty blocks or more,
Crossed the track, not coming back,
Walked out and shut the door.