Hug me like you care - Page 2

Jomi · April 8th, 2007

I live and work in the north east of England and my job takes me all over the region. One day I came across a very pretty young woman lying on the ground, I tried for a while to rouse her but there was no response, I was going to phone for an ambulance when a young boy aged about 10 or 11 in a school uniform came up and told me it was ok, she was his mother and she was 'high', she'd be ok in a while. He sat beside her and stroked her hair and rubbed her hands to warm them. I walked on my way through a land of smashed bottles and boarded windows, I didn't realise at the time but it had affected me deeply, I can still picture the scene like it was yesterday.

I'd like to write more songs and I'd appreciate your comments including criticism, be gentle but don't hold back (he says, quaking).
I know that a bit of my local accent comes through in the song, is that good or bad?

thanks,

John

Kirk Lorange · #16 April 8th, 2007

Hauntingly beautiful, Jomi. I love your accent and voice. We'll all be hearing much more from you in the years ahead, I know it.

Aunt Doty · #17 April 8th, 2007

Absolutely beautiful!!!!!!!! Loved knowing the story behind it!

pamelody · #18 April 8th, 2007

Your song left me speechless with watery eyes...well done indeed!
You have a soulful gift and the accent was so suited to this piece. Don't stop now

tomg123 · #19 April 8th, 2007

I can only echo the comments so far, your accent only adds to the song. The rolling fingers type picking is something i like to do but sounds like you have it down real well

elganto · #20 April 9th, 2007

you should try and get onto the folk circuit mate you alot better than alot of folks ive heard i would pay for your music

Sano · #21 April 9th, 2007

Loved the guitar playing and singing - accent just places it geographically. Along with that and your ability with social commentary you truly have an opportunity of making this world that little bit better...you certainly made my good afternoon better! Thankyou Jomi.

Iain

OldG · #22 April 10th, 2007

Absolutely stunning !

I have to admit - after reading about the story behind the song, I was reduced to tears listening to it... Me, a grown man, go figure...

Jomi · #23 April 10th, 2007

I must have read through these posts a dozen times, I can't begin to thank all of you for the comments you've made. I'm lost for words.
When my head returns to it's normal size I'll try posting another song I wrote.
Thank you all again

eddiez152 · #24 April 10th, 2007

Jomi,
You can certainly count me as a fan. Its great work. Good guitar playing, but its all in the vocals, and the tunes your present.
eddiez

Fretsource · #25 April 11th, 2007

Quote:

Originally Posted by elganto

you should try and get onto the folk circuit mate you alot better than alot of folks ive heard i would pay for your music

Agreed! Not many on the folk circuit are this good.

knight46 · #26 April 11th, 2007

John,
This was very good, the vocals were smooth and had deep feeling and the playing was very good also. I was very impressed by the lyrics, it was apparent that the encounter touched you and you related the story and your feelings in the lyrics and the vocals.

eddiez152 · #27 April 11th, 2007

I see this made featured recording of the week. It most certainly deserves it.

solidwalnut · #28 April 11th, 2007

Quote:

Originally Posted by Jomi

I live and work in the north east of England and my job takes me all over the region. One day I came across a very pretty young woman lying on the ground, I tried for a while to rouse her but there was no response, I was going to phone for an ambulance when a young boy aged about 10 or 11 in a school uniform came up and told me it was ok, she was his mother and she was 'high', she'd be ok in a while. He sat beside her and stroked her hair and rubbed her hands to warm them. I walked on my way through a land of smashed bottles and boarded windows, I didn't realise at the time but it had affected me deeply, I can still picture the scene like it was yesterday.

I'd like to write more songs and I'd appreciate your comments including criticism, be gentle but don't hold back (he says, quaking).
I know that a bit of my local accent comes through in the song, is that good or bad?

thanks,

John

John--

That was a marvelous work. The emotion comes through the song really nicely. The guitar playing and the progression itself took me on a journey. The musicality of it seemed to be the perfect bed for the story you told. The music is really well done and is hauntingly and lyrically enticing.

Can you post the lyrics? I'm interested in seeing them. While I think that off the bat they're excellent, I wonder if when listening to them one can understand the story as you told it to us. Don't get me wrong, I think they probably can but it's possible they could be tweaked to make the story shine through. Maybe I misunderstood the structure, but I heard 'your face is really pretty and I like your long dark hair' many times. I wonder if that's necessary.

I feel like Simon on American Idol. The negative one. I don't mean to take away from the great work, I just want to be helpful.

Excellent stuff, man.

Steve

iltpff · #29 April 11th, 2007

Jomi, that was beautiful and really clear vocals too...

What was your recording equipment?

nowhere-man · #30 April 11th, 2007

Very beautiful Jomi. I can't help wondering what the young woman who inspired you to write it would think if she heard it.