Steve,
Thank you for taking the time to write all of that, I really appreciate the effort you made.
When this incident happened (finding an unconscious woman), there were very few words spoken, when the young lad showed up he could see I was going to call someone as I had my phone out, he told me she was his mother and she'd be ok in a while, he was telling me that he was taking charge, so I left.
As I walked off he was rubbing her hands (it was a cold day), when I looked back he was stroking her hair.
Everything in the song is from my thoughts afterwards, I'm trying to say what I think the boy must be thinking (rightly or wrongly).
Before I posted the song I removed the second from last verse because I thought it stretched things a bit:
Maybe you could meet someone
and he could be my Dad,
and we could live together
like the family we once had
I think I wrote a chorus to keep bringing you back from his thoughts to his present situation, kneeling next to his unconscious mother.
He clearly loved her but did she love him? (I'm sure she did but it would really mess up the song to say so!)
I have to admit I'm finding it very difficult to explain my thoughts behind the song, it just sort of poured out of me over a couple of hours.
Feel free to ask more though and thank you again for the critique.
John
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