Hey hilch.. I thought that was very good. in my mind the only change would be switch out "another" for just "a"...."where freedom isn't just a word". thats how it plays in my thoughts.
I like how you tell the story..
1st verse -where you are coming from
2nd verse -what you feel
3rd verse - wondering whats next in the future
maybe another consisting of how to see the world if we all could just ??? something along that train of thought... again just my perspective...
nice work Trev.....Kenny
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