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Old March 22nd, 2007
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I corrected some spelling for you. I would change some of the words, but that is more my style than yours so they are ok the way they are.


I watched the news today
It left me in a sad sad way
All those children dying
And so many women crying
Those petty politicians lying


Their innocence lost forever
Childhood so ghastly severed
Their torment will live ever
Why does it have to go on
I don't care who is right or wrong

I see the below as a chorus kind of thing with a change in melody to point out that this is the pay off or the meat of the tune. I see the single line as the last line of the chorus done instrumentally and then again as part of the last two lines.

Will we ever see that world
Where freedom isn't just another word
Mr Lennon sang about it
Soldiers died around it
Will we ever see that world

Will we ever see that world


Will we ever see that world
Where freedom isn't just another word


One of your best yet Hiltch.

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