Personally I like it. Probably 'cos John Lennon and the Beatles had such an effect on me growing up in the 60s/70s...and looking for a brave new world away from pain and suffering. I'm not sure of one word, "taument". Did you mean 'torment'? It fits for me. The intent of the song comes through for me...sometimes too much fiddling with lyrics can change the original intent. How do you imagine the song to be...slow/fast etc?
Iain
|