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Old March 11th, 2007
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Helps if i actually cut and paste the lyrics in, doesnt it?

Ummm ..I'm guessing the answer to that is yes

Matty , now this is just my opinion on song writting and how I like to set a song out ..

1/ Seetle on a rhyme scheme such { AA-BB-CC } etc <--Let me know if that does not make sence..

2/ Put the story in order like morning -noon - nite ..etc

I only say this as the second verse seems it should have been before the first ,

Not all of it just parts like your talking to your girl in the first verse , then in the second verse your driveing home ..Did I miss something here or am I reading this wrong ..

Seeing the bushfires burning in the distance ......

I drove my self home, the only car on the road ....

Then after all that seeing your girl , to me would tell and paint a better picture ,

Of course this is how my warped brain works and may disagree with what you believe ,
It's only my opinion and I just wanted give you some feed back that might be helpful

Cheers

Trev...

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